When I first read the following piece of Essay done by my Secondary 2 student, I gasped my breath away and almost breathe my last.

Here you go…(schools named XX for privacy reason)

When I was in Primary six we used to have P6-Graduation Party!!! I wait for my friends under the block putting on my lip gloss because in the party you can wear anything and can make-up our face! Me and Anita, were waiting for ramesh, safit, sangeetha, uma and dorshana my friends.In the evening of course. When they reach to us! We left the place quickly , we sat on the school hall table. I sat with ramesh, uma sat with Darshana, Anita sat with Safit, Sangeethat sat somewhere else!

Then it was about 8.15 I look outside the hall and saw Darshana, Uma, Safit, Anita, Sangeetha, they left me and ramesh in the table and went to the toilet. Some Malay and Chinese were outside too! I felt alone. From there, Sangeetha pulled me and I pulled Ramesh hand, we all too when out of the hall. As the school hall outside, there is only two toilets male, female are crowded. From there, Safit say can we walk around the school and tell ghost stories! We all agreed! My school was XX Primary School! We never walk around the school, only the canteen light was open! We sat down there and listened to my friend Safit as he told us the story!

In XX secondary school, which right now I am studying is haunted! There was a girl named Jennifer now she went to poly. She had a tournament! She played her first match. She felt tired and sweaty so she went alone to the second floor toilet. There was no one in there. As she entered she discovered mops sprawling all over the floor, toilet papers were all over the sinks/ She didn’t care, she went to the cubicle. Without any warning, the toilet bowls began to flush by itself. She went to check it was nothing then the toilet flush itself and one by one! She felt uneasy and wanted to exit then as she walked, the taps started to flow by itself! She ran out! Ramesh said “scary” never mind, let’s play true or dare game we all agreed!

We went up to the hall and walk pass the toilet! We did open numbers, pointed one must dare to do whatever we agreed! So it was Uma, Safit say “ok you must dare to walk past the class and come back to us” ! Uma I did it! I felt bored so I and ramesh when behind her from there my classmate made a sound “dare you dare” in a pontianak voice we got scared and run back to the hall as fast as we could. Solihein my classmate boy laugh at me, ramesh and uma!

It was 945 we ran out of the hall, I, ramesh,uma….(and a few more names) and 2 more girls! Chase after Solihein until to the 7th floor because principal close the gate, the 6th floor we all caught him. My friends and I were happy and suddenly from all the way back at the end of the classroom someone was pointing at us with white colour dress hands with blood! As I turn, my feet were stucked to the ground and my body seemed to be momentarily parlysed at the very moment. My friends, one by one of my friends too! And she shouted “you dare to come here and see” Ha Ha Ha Ha Ha! She non stop laughing I know it was a pontinak@ I shouted “ you stupid pontianak go back! “ MY friends shouted “Yah stupid.” Pontianak “I will come and catch you rats” Ha Ha Ha and she walk towards us, by the gtime she walk we scream and run to the hall to dance!We can’t see here clearly.


Managed to guess the topic? I doubt you did. She was told to write an essay containing the phrase in red in fact! Exclamation marks in like every 3 sentences, simple language, out-of-point, singlish, all the “ha-ha”s, no storyline, no conclusion, broken sentences………………Believe me, it was the first time I read such an essay in my 18 years of life.

Despite clearly knowing her standard on the second lesson, I am not giving up on her. So what I did was to went through and edited her essay with her…AND! Keep in tuned for Draft 3…(shucks, I think my English is going haywire after typing her essay out)

Shayna sang @ 2:33 PM

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